Clover Rain the Dead Girl

by **lovelycomplexfan** Thu Dec 06, 2012 3:53 pm

Name:Clover Rain

Nickname:Dead Girl

Age:13

Gender:Female

Power:Can hear the dead and kind of knows when someone will dies.

Weapon:Throwing knives

Strength:Disappearing, stealing and moving silently

Weakness:The dead, people of authority and people whose power is stronger than hers

Appearance: Clover is quite tall and mysterious. She has black hair and lightly tanned body. She always wears black clothes and never looks anyone straight in the eye. She doesn't like to talk often.

History:She used to live near Coates and never really acknowledged Perido Beach. She used to visit Sam but he ignored her. Her power increased just before the FAYZ and her parents threw her out because of this. Now she is in Perido Beach and is coming to see what she can do to help the cause of good.

Personality: Clover is quite dangerous and likes to stay near to where people died or will die. She always wears black because of her knowing that death will come. She is quite snappy when she does talk. But she does have a soft side and loves her cat Jinx. She certainly doesn't like to talk to her friends as she doesn't have any except for Jinx as he helped her when she was dead inside.

by **Faith Lehane** Thu Dec 06, 2012 4:05 pm

What an interesting first character!
I'd love to RP one day, but first could you make some few changes?
1) Just some spaces that need to be added and some grammar checks.
2) Her power to tell when someone will die and what will happen seems kinda like a 2 bar talent to me. Could you say that she can communicate with those who have died, and has a strong sense when someone is close to dying? That would certainly work better.
3) I'd love if you could give some more strengths and weaknesses, because they are both the flaws and what make a character more real.
Other than that, Clover is a very good first character.
Make these small changes, and I'll happily come back and accept her